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Fogtown: A Musical

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Again the dusk has filled this town with fog a sight I've grown accustomed to; odd shapes and silhouettes become dancers and these cracked calloused streets have become their stage. As they dance a bullfrog belches in the background a light wind rustles some leaves. In the distance I hear the sawmill; metal blades gnarling through the flesh of a helpless, old redwood begging for his life.

A night-shift construction crew thirsting for the blood of the pavement, crushing and whacking with hammers, act as a percussion section, creating the foundation. Once in a while, traffic honks in frustration as the men halt their progress, adding another element to my ongoing masterpiece, and every element is in unparalleled harmony—God himself leading the band. A warm, dreary smell similar to the smell of a brief summer downpour seeps into my lungs, mesmerizing me in an eerie, beautiful way. I am paralyzed in time, sensing the musical that is taking place around me. I listen, I look; my grip tightens on the oak armrest of my porch swing. This is exhilarating; I hope it never ends! "What a terrible dream to chase," I thought, but I knew how much I love these nights. I long for them. As I pondered the idea of making this last forever, a twilight rain lulls me into dreamland.

 

Comments (5)

  1. Brandon_Hennen

I really enjoyed the vividness of this short sketch. It seems more of a prose poem than anything else. The descriptions crackle off the page quite nicely.

 
  1. Vangoman

Love the way you used the asphalt oil to compact these words down into something wonderful. Congradulations on this award winning piece.

 
  1. mellowood

Hi I am Melusi,wow what a wonderful story brilliantly written with rich grammar and now I am thirsting for more.Really I am,is there a way I can get the full story of this prose and read it all.

 
  1. Tess

This poem emboldens me to want to sit beside you on that porch and enjoy the sounds, and compose, compose...

 
  1. steffenmary574@yahoo.com

Good story and wrote good grammar. Very creative!
Keep up the good work!

 
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