Sundown Plows (completed)

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A warm baking sunset spreads me across the dirt

As sundown plows vacancies of worthless earth

Before sunrise explodes the midnight crows

Warning of another victim under the turf

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ugwerks
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Hey. I have no idea what this means but like it very much. Think maybe the victim should be "beneath" the earth, but that's just me. Very nice nonetheless. Thanks for putting it up. Ug

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Vangoman/ Dan Van Fleet
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Ya, I've already changed the last line "again" it now reads (Mournful moon tunes seranade my soul back home. I think I may be working this until it's becomes that poem we each hope for in our poems. Thanks for the input-right after posting it I...

Ya, I've already changed the last line "again" it now reads (Mournful moon tunes seranade my soul back home. I think I may be working this until it's becomes that poem we each hope for in our poems. Thanks for the input-right after posting it I hated the last line!

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ugwerks
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That's a good move. Changes the entire persona of the work. Keep pluggin' away and repost when you're happy with it. I'll look forward to seeing it. Ug

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I like your edit and your stamina... lol I just put the ones I can't get right, away in a notebook for a rainy day... don't drive yourself crazy but I do look forward to the finished poem.

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