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originally published 2010

 

We each have our own turf 
we defend at any cost.
Boasting of our victories
dismissing what we’ve lost.
your words taste of poison
and mine like bitter wine
living here  in our Palestine.



The roots of our discontent
have long become obscure.
It’s just a useful pretext
to see what we’ll each endure.
We revel in the glory
of each injustice we find,
living here, in our Palestine

We quibble over boundaries
and invade the others space.
We thrive on the discomfort
of each others falls from grace.
it’s no good way of living
but it’s what we now define
as a life, living in our Palestine.

Why don’t we give it a rest?
Aren’t you tired

 

of the constant misery?
Is there no safe refuge

from this unrelenting strife?
Is there no escaping history?

It’s a sign of our weakness
and our fear of compromise
that binds us to each other
in a web of spiteful lies.
We could mend this rift if only
we would dare cross the line
that divides us here
in our Palestine.

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very good poem .... It's interesting that even describing the area as Palestine would be a cause for contention with some. I think that you captured the deadlock very well.

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It was intended to describe a failing personal relationship through the metaphor of a place of comparable emotional angst. Happy to have it read either way. Thanks

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Yeah, I catch that now. I was only able to see the literal part of the metaphor...that's my fault however. I think your poem is even better now!

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I'm guessing that's the downside of the title. As a subject, it is so pervasive as to overwhelm any alternative interpretation. Perhaps it could have been titled "Marriage," but that would be extraordinarily gloomy and much too pat, no matter...

I'm guessing that's the downside of the title. As a subject, it is so pervasive as to overwhelm any alternative interpretation. Perhaps it could have been titled "Marriage," but that would be extraordinarily gloomy and much too pat, no matter how accurate.

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I think the title is appropriate. Perhaps there should be a vague hint of a relationship somewhere along the line. Nothing blunt, as you want the metaphor to be strong. Very powerful poem.

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I like the poem a lot. Good work! I don't agree with you, Josh, however. The author comes off as very open-minded; willing to listen to others' opinions while your statement about "Palestine" negates any prospect of dialogue.

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Very strong poem and metaphor, but I have to disagree with Brandon Hennen. If you read the poem carefully, paying close attention to the author's diction, then you can pick up at the subtle hints in reference to the failed relationship. The lines...

Very strong poem and metaphor, but I have to disagree with Brandon Hennen. If you read the poem carefully, paying close attention to the author's diction, then you can pick up at the subtle hints in reference to the failed relationship. The lines "We quibble over boudaries/ and invade each other's space" are particularly indicative of the metaphor, in my opinion.

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