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Love Inside Out

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Love inside out
Exposed the meaty
Heart of the matter
 
That sump pump
Plumbing the dregs
Runs bloody
 
Before it runs
Clear
 

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Good imagery ,Good choice of words, keep up the good work.

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Thank you for your compliments. I am undecided whether I like this or not. I wonder if it is too veiled.

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The words create great emphasis. It requires one to reread over. May I comment that it feels like you just ended it abruptly? It feels like all of the emotion that was at the beginning of it, ended so simply, if I may say. Maybe that is part...

The words create great emphasis. It requires one to reread over. May I comment that it feels like you just ended it abruptly? It feels like all of the emotion that was at the beginning of it, ended so simply, if I may say. Maybe that is part of what you mean by veiled.

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