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Tongue twisting round,

Ears pierced by the sound.

Mouth spewing lies.

Your face,

Wearing a disguise.

 

 

You are transparent,

To me.

It’s apparent,

But you can’t see.

 

Playing the part,

No hesitation to your start.

Every moment planned.

Your soul,

It’s dark and damned.

 

You are transparent,

To me.

It’s apparent,

But you can’t see.

 

Never could you be,

Any sort of friend to me.

There’s not even a chance.

You're gone,

Lost is your opportunity to advance.

 

You are transparent,

To me.

It’s apparent,

But you can’t see.

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I like this a lot, the words seem to be waltzing down the page like a waterfall off the rocks, crashing against the culprit. This also could be the start of great country western song.

Vangoman
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts, it's always very nice to gain a glimpse into how my expressions are interpreted by another.
"a waterfall off the rocks,crashing against the culprit." - your words do great to explain my emotions that were...

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, it's always very nice to gain a glimpse into how my expressions are interpreted by another.
"a waterfall off the rocks,crashing against the culprit." - your words do great to explain my emotions that were feeding my pen. You musta been a fly on the wall.

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Goldil0x
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I love how the "You are transparent"-part is repeated throughout the poem

vanstrow
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Thank you; the intent was to show the various ways I perceived the transparencies and expose them.

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