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Cherry Blossoms

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In quite darkness

Clock hands stop the flow

Of Tsunami tears

Washing down our fears

Of our disappeared

 

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Gazes face the wave

Today we harvest

The afterlife crop

Rings and Childs things

And all that remain

Of those who took flight

 

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Flower rafts begin floating

On gentle Basho’s Haiku’s

Life is but a cloud floating

As pink cherry blossoms bloom

Samurais and Cuckoo’s cry

Pedaling the tears good bye

 

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Proud flowers worth the living

Pink in blossom scent they fly

High tide took from the giving

Low tide sang sad lullaby

Cherry blossom hurried plead

“Hanami” Sukura Tree

 

 

 

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It seems like you're really experimenting of late. You can rhyme in an airy and almost mythical way. You should really consider a long epic poem with cantos. If the plot is good, it would be, well, "epic!"

Joshua Hennen
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Blush then bow, wow what a head rush (ha,ha). Anwser is yes! as in the reflection of life it seems the light is always changing. Cantos possibly the best example of expression left on Earth! However I fear these days very few will spend the...

Blush then bow, wow what a head rush (ha,ha). Anwser is yes! as in the reflection of life it seems the light is always changing. Cantos possibly the best example of expression left on Earth! However I fear these days very few will spend the time to read because of it's length. But as always your right and I thinks me give er a try. Thank for input Josh, we all need it to maintain some type of growth.

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Vangoman
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I think it can be done if each canto or section is short enough so that one can be read in one sitting and still add to the overall plot.

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