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My stomach feels full of itself,
   Swollen from panty line to breast line,
Hot the sun burns my skin,
   Icy the rain.

Dissolving me like minty gum. 

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Joshua Hennen
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Short but effective... you definitely covey the sense of contrasts.

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Thanks... it was a trip suntanning in the rain!

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Joshua Hennen
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Why did you choose the image of minty gum? It works but I wonder why....

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Because that's exactly how I felt on the beach, laying in the sun roasting but being rained on with ice cold drops that seemed to come from nowhere... it felt almost orgasmic That and it put me in mind of minty gum... that super hot with the icy...

Because that's exactly how I felt on the beach, laying in the sun roasting but being rained on with ice cold drops that seemed to come from nowhere... it felt almost orgasmic That and it put me in mind of minty gum... that super hot with the icy cold. Dirty mouth clean it up! lol

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