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You and I

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You and I

Bare faces branded in our truth

Raw lies cut loose in our eyes

Can’t hide from

You and I

 A point now moot

.

Under an unreliable sun

We had become

The love all hope to be

But we could not succeed

But for awhile

When you and I

Were each others destiny

.

We tamed love

Rode wild sunsets

Set seductive wishes free

Didn’t I

Didn’t you

Have so much love for

You and me

.

But beat up hearts

Turn in time began to fall

On both our faces

In all our places

Finding dead end walls

Falling outs

From your tears

The fault that fell on them

Was mine

And so unforgivable dear

It was me

Who lost

True love for

You and I

.

Memories are just backs

Sacks filled with empty air

Endless sighs

Of the “who knows why”

Loves skin became so scared

A heat once so unstoppable

Burnt down and died

Like some old friend

The flames and fires

Along with desire

Blown away in the winds

Of you and I

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Perfect. I especially like the last section "Memories are just backs..etc.." and how it is "blown away in the winds OF you and I" instead of just "blown away in the winds.. you and I". It left me with a feeling of a fleeting memory, bittersweet....

Perfect. I especially like the last section "Memories are just backs..etc.." and how it is "blown away in the winds OF you and I" instead of just "blown away in the winds.. you and I". It left me with a feeling of a fleeting memory, bittersweet. Very nice.

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Thank You Music, You have a great knack for finding the most important line in the poem, Memories are backs, Left behind us-full in our hearts and mind but still pieces of us left behind like empty air. I wanted to somehow tie it into the...

Thank You Music, You have a great knack for finding the most important line in the poem, Memories are backs, Left behind us-full in our hearts and mind but still pieces of us left behind like empty air. I wanted to somehow tie it into the beginning " bare faces branded in our truths raw lies cut loose. Don't you think Music that we tend to remember love maybe better than it actually was- and how the raw lies were made up to help us justify our raw emotions of those truths left behind with our past lovers? I think we find it hard to accept that maybe it wasn't all we thought it was-or it would of made it. Anyway thank you for your kind comments. Us poet's tend to pretend we can do this alone but we need other poet's to help us find our homes.

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I totally think we build false memories... to relive the pain is not nearly as favorable as remembering the sweet times I have to say this is one of your best Thx

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