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Fade Away

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Don’t worry about me  I’ll be okay

The tears in my eyes won’t be there one day

I’m not upset with the fact that things didn’t go my way

I’m upset with all the things I couldn’t bring myself to say.

 

So many things were going through my mind

And I didn’t want you or anyone to see me cry

But now that I’m alone

I can’t hide the hurt you left behind

I don’t know how I’ll get through this

But I know that I will be okay

It felt like god was holding me

As my heart was breaking and I drove away.

 

This song came on the radio

After we broke up and I left today

It was like god was telling me I’ll get stronger

That my tears for you will stop and the hurt

Will eventually fade away.

Telling me it’s okay to cry

When your heart is breaking so much inside

 

The deep wounds you left will be scares someday

And I know that I’ll be able to look at them and say

“I am stronger; I won’t make the mistakes I made yesterday today,

My heart can put itself back together; I’ll be able to smile freely someday.”

And like all scares they will eventually lighten and all together fade away.

 

 

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Hey everyone please leave a comment and tell me what you think of my poems. Thanks!

Mary Paul .
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The message in your poem is worthy, however even though I am not one to be hurtful, this poem has alot of extra words with a bit of extra forced rhyming. First stanza- "Don't worry I'll be okay-tears will dry my eyes one day-Thought things didn't...

The message in your poem is worthy, however even though I am not one to be hurtful, this poem has alot of extra words with a bit of extra forced rhyming. First stanza- "Don't worry I'll be okay-tears will dry my eyes one day-Thought things didn't go my way" I think you get the point. A re-write of this poem shorter and with less emphasis on "Rhyming" could bring this poem into a great light. I say this only in the arena of helping. If you don't agree throw my words in the water. I hope you will re-write this and re-submit as a shorter and more to the point poem, it could be fantastic. " I always ask myself can I say this with less words? I hope I haven't offended

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Vangoman
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Opinions unplugged... I agree with Vangoman that heartbreak is definitely a worthy cause, but we are all poets... so being aquainted with pain and agony is a give in... you have to make the reader feel, understand, live or relive the same...

Opinions unplugged... I agree with Vangoman that heartbreak is definitely a worthy cause, but we are all poets... so being aquainted with pain and agony is a give in... you have to make the reader feel, understand, live or relive the same torture. What makes your heartbreak so special? Do you bleed like me? - My advice to you would be to word count. How many times do you repeat a word? Is there another word that means the same but makes you FEEL totally different? Does one line repeat itself throughout the same piece? Are you beating a dead horse by being redundant? Or is your message different with each stanza? Can you make me hurt like you with "less" words? As Vango says? - I suggest that you invest in a thesaurus, they are beyond helpful. - Also the rythym of your words is pleasant but watch your syllables... one beat too many can throw a reader into a tailspin trying to catch up again later. It's okay NOT to rhyme. Don't let it dictate your piece. One last piece of advice... watch your spelling! i.e. scares... mispelled words are sloppy and cause the reader to pause and lose momentum. Okay... so I hope this critique is helpful. If you ever need a friendly edit or an honest opinion... well that's what we all come here for so don't be afraid to ask. I myself have grown here at this site and I encourage you to do the same! Welcome

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