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Into the Deep

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I don't know if anyone else will understand this piece. It is for someone in particular (they are not here) and written in metaphor. However I also thought I would share it here too.


Into the Deep.

Darkness has fallen within my eyes
Insecurity has infected my mind
The knot has tighten on the inside,
I am worried by what I will find.

I stroll down to the waters edge,
My gaze toward the horizon ahead,
Deeper and deeper, step by step,
I look for the promises, the words you said.

I hear a whisper within the breeze,
A voice inside, warning me,
But I ignore it as I need to see,
Below the surface, within the sea.

Up above the dark clouds gather,
The coldness of the night stirs the waves,
I feel the grip as I am dragged under,
Before me is the truth of the game you play.

I struggle to breathe as I lose belief,
I look for positivity in the sea of the negative,
But the deeper I go and the more I see,
The light fades above as darkness surrounds me.

The last bubble of life floats above me,
It rises up to the surface to be set free,
I release my life and leave it behind me,
Say goodbye to the promises that once captured me.

So in summation of the words I write,
And the want of reason to continue the fight,
You say I am strong, that I have the strength,
Yet I am dying and weaken, with every breath.

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This at face value appears to be a woman with vindictive love motives, but I fear that this might be too easy for a metaphor. Rather than the game of love, It sounds like faith had been drowned and is found much easier to dis-belive than to...

This at face value appears to be a woman with vindictive love motives, but I fear that this might be too easy for a metaphor. Rather than the game of love, It sounds like faith had been drowned and is found much easier to dis-belive than to believe. No matter, as I love the way you brought the sea in to your poem and the amount of great quality of lines presented throughout the work. This is one of those poem,s that the more you read-the more you like, great job unwanted.

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