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Comments are Comets Flying

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My comments to your colors

Come from my pure white heart

I read you with my eyelids open

And from your words I cannot part

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It makes me stop and think

Why my words cannot find this art

How does your tongue hurt me so

How do your arrows pierce my heart

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The way you drip blood from your words

Untangling single flowers into robust bouquets

You expose the morning silence of the woods

Burning fireswords at night coloring in full moon days

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Oh how I wish I could turn my comments into comets

Scorching the moist out of fresh earth’s rain

Swirling up sunshine mist, mixing with my darkest pain

Dripping down at your feet while leaving that indelible stain

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But I am just the igniter for the lighters

I am here to watch you grow

You are the true fire fighters

I am just for show

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And though I molest your every word

So sad of this I am to know

But in your colored words I find

My mind has time to grow

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An interesting look at the critique and a desire to blow someone away with your work, very nicely done.

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I too am in awe of the many great writers on this site...

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A boutique of bright and wonderful cented mmmm's

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