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Papal

Pupil

Purple

Portal

Its all

Pitiful


I assume I am the only one to make this assumption.

How will I ever find out.

Will it be logged in the Guinness book of records  

printed in a newspaper

Where then. In my head.


Postal.


I am fighting the obvious

My life is that of a hermit

Without her


A while

 

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Yes, friend: without her. What about with her?

Joshua Hennen
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with her i wouldnt be a hermit. id be an astronaut

Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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I was an astronaut once. Earthy reality crippled me. Now I'm a lame sum'bitch.

Joshua Hennen
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drop acid, you can still get into outerspace.

Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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Hey, don't you wanna go down, like some disgraced Cosmonaut?

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im not russian.....


Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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I liked the poem overall, it had a stream of consciousness feel at first and then it leveled out. I found the very last line interesting. It stands there alone and disconnected from the body of the work. Just a question: was the word "how" in the...

I liked the poem overall, it had a stream of consciousness feel at first and then it leveled out. I found the very last line interesting. It stands there alone and disconnected from the body of the work. Just a question: was the word "how" in the line "How will ever find out" a typo?

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yes a typo. naturally the piece i double check has a typo. its scientific, my brain wanted the 'I' to be there when i reread it. stupid brain!

Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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Thank you soi-disant for the clarification of your not being Russian, but I was referring, perhaps too vaguely to the lyrics of Low by Cracker. This poem immediately reminded me of the song for some reason, and I feebly attempted to quote a line...

Thank you soi-disant for the clarification of your not being Russian, but I was referring, perhaps too vaguely to the lyrics of Low by Cracker. This poem immediately reminded me of the song for some reason, and I feebly attempted to quote a line from the song, incorrect as it were upon checking the actal lyrics, it is "displaced cosmonaut," as opposed to disgraced. We hear what we want. In case you are curious you can check out the song and its lyrics here:
http://www.lyrics.com/low-lyrics-cracker.html

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no problems alberto. thanks for the link. i will check it out and let you know.

Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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