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Wonderland Lake

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WONDERLAND LAKE

And above
chattering leaves
of deciduous trees
momentarily kindled by the wind
with their supple vitality now giving strength inward

may no longer feel her breath as She --- inhales
---and -aaa- sighs with purposeful ease

Only the lakes orbit
lining the earthly indulgent mud
undulates in flow.
Feathered creatures, pause -
and land on our Mother's icy surface
with an orchestrated shatter..delicate percussion.

I blissfully so tenderly touch
my soft belly
and feel Her winter love
delight in my bare skin.

My nose burns in the silence
I am really here
in this physical body
that now
at least
feels anything but as I receive one true nature

with my breath as my caravan,
I melt into the Earth.

The geese hear my soul
they mustn't rest too long
free
yet on mother's time
together.

But alas
a few take their time, I laugh in my similitude
To enjoy the howl around their feathers a ruffle longer
and depart.

I sigh with the wind.

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I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. I think that the word similitude should be replaced though, it's too wonky for a work with so many fresh expressions.

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Yes! I see what you mean. I'll see what other words inspire.. thanks~

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i really like the first half of this poem.

'may no longer feel her breath as She --- inhales
---and -aaa- sighs with purposeful ease'

this is an awesome phrase and use of grammer.

however i think the second half got a little tight with the...

i really like the first half of this poem.

'may no longer feel her breath as She --- inhales
---and -aaa- sighs with purposeful ease'

this is an awesome phrase and use of grammer.

however i think the second half got a little tight with the order of things and the type of words used were different, more complex - not just similitude as jh suggested.

but its still a really good piece of writing
Soi-Disant, The Blue Roof

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