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Numb

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Have a sip.

Take a hit.

Chug this brew.

Swallow this pill.

Fall into the haze and feel the nothingness.

Let yourself go numb.

Have him explore you; lift up your skirt.

Who is he? Pretend you know him.

Stop resisting. Stop caring.

Lose yourself. Lose yourself.

Be popular. Be popular. Be popular.

I am lost.

Is this really High School?



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bravo! it almost becomes an incantation, a chant or "cheer". the last five lines are stunning. plus the idea of identity lost in some haze of youthfulness. well done.

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Welcome to the site, and thank you for sharing your work with us. I read through the pieces you have posted so far, my favorite being "Tinted Windows." I would offer these suggestions. Edit more carefully before posting. I realize the caps in...

Welcome to the site, and thank you for sharing your work with us. I read through the pieces you have posted so far, my favorite being "Tinted Windows." I would offer these suggestions. Edit more carefully before posting. I realize the caps in Red-Lipstick were on purpose, but there were a few examples where you needed to clean up the piece a little.
Remember, this is a coming out party for your works, so treat them like precious children who have to be just right before going out.
It is refreshing to see young minds bitten by the muse. Keep writing!!

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Hah well thank you. Yeah, I just looked at it and I have no idea what's up with it. I just tried to fix it but it wouldn't let me. Oh well.

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Thanks

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Haley, I had the same problem when I first started posting. Try this, if you write in word, open notepad then cut and paste from word to notepad before putting it in the submit window. Cut and paste from Notepad to the submit screen. This...

Haley, I had the same problem when I first started posting. Try this, if you write in word, open notepad then cut and paste from word to notepad before putting it in the submit window. Cut and paste from Notepad to the submit screen. This seems to work.

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