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Mind Rape

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He's so subtle
You don't notice the scars
Until he's gone...
His charm seduces
His smile invites you
Even his clever tongue
Eases your doubts
Yet when he leaves
When his damage is complete
You are tainted...
You cry and weep
You scream and sleep
But you can't escape
The memories....

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Haunting. The image goes quite well with the content of the poem.

atamulonis
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Yeah. I wrote it in response to something that happened to me years ago. But also because it was the first time I had seen the Vagina Monologues. They were a good bit of my recovery.

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The emotion behind this is good and real, but I think the execution needs work. I think ellipses could be changed into periods and would be more startling and make the phrases before them seem less elevated. I also think the use of very...

The emotion behind this is good and real, but I think the execution needs work. I think ellipses could be changed into periods and would be more startling and make the phrases before them seem less elevated. I also think the use of very simplistic emotions (as seen in word choices like "cry" and "scream" as well as the phrasing in lines 4-6) could be explored further. The lack of metaphor could translate to confessionalism. I enjoy the rhyme between weep and sleep, especially because of both the alliteration and the strange conflict in the line containing sleep: "You scream and sleep." I hope you push this more.

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