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And when you look at me...

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...And when you look at me... And when you kiss me... And the way you hold my hand and play with my fingers... And the way you never judge me... And when you ask me how I want it... And then you say, 

"I love you..."


... And when you put up my mood swings... And how you deal with my family... And the way you feel in the morning... And how you calm me when I panic... And when you laugh at my unbelievable need to schedule... 

"I love you!"


...And you make me feel safe... And you never realize how sexy you are... And you know exactly who you are... And you know exactly what you want... And you make me laugh until I can't breather... And I can't help it... 

"I love you..." 

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Lovely. I feel the excitement in the verse, constructed there for all of us to see, the stuttering, overwhelming nature of Loving. A suggestion; perhaps a double "and," here and there, so as to increase the sense of excitement at being so in...

Lovely. I feel the excitement in the verse, constructed there for all of us to see, the stuttering, overwhelming nature of Loving. A suggestion; perhaps a double "and," here and there, so as to increase the sense of excitement at being so in Love. Like when a small child is telling about something exciting they've just seen, and they'll say - and, and.... - Excellent work!!
(Please take suggestion with grain of salt. Just really enjoyed the poem.

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