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Sensation of Infatuation

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Temptation  

this momentary hesitation

is the constant complication  

the contradiction 

      is the motivation to find 

      the true intention behind

a simple glimpse of your affection  

      so intense the passion ignites

the seed of such intense fascination

       that dwindles and dies

inside my imagination.

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I loved the way this started out. It was almost hard to breathe as I envisioned what you were describing. It ended too suddenly though, you needed a couple more lines to transition from fiery passion to death. Just my thoughts, for what they're...

I loved the way this started out. It was almost hard to breathe as I envisioned what you were describing. It ended too suddenly though, you needed a couple more lines to transition from fiery passion to death. Just my thoughts, for what they're worth.

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emiller0813
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Thank you, I'd be lying if I said I didn't agree. Poems aren't my strong suit to say the least, but they come up sometimes, and I got to a point at the end where I lost what spawned it in the first place, and this is where I hit send. If it...

Thank you, I'd be lying if I said I didn't agree. Poems aren't my strong suit to say the least, but they come up sometimes, and I got to a point at the end where I lost what spawned it in the first place, and this is where I hit send. If it happens to show up again, though, a revision will definitely happen.

Thanks for taking time to read and comment, I appreciate it.

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phil.marquez98
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I like this poem too. For some reason I don't remember seeing it when it was first posted. The word play is excellent because it is natural sounding and each line is sufficient to cause me to stop and think. But to your point about ending...

I like this poem too. For some reason I don't remember seeing it when it was first posted. The word play is excellent because it is natural sounding and each line is sufficient to cause me to stop and think. But to your point about ending suddenly, I think that its abrupt ending is effective. It's just like temptation in how it flares up and then dies suddenly.

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